–From https://www.nownovel.com/blog/writing-tenses-past-present-future/—
Writing tenses: 5 tips to get past, present and future right
Understanding how to use writing tenses is challenging. How do you mix past, present and future tense without making the reader giddy? What is the difference between ‘simple’ and ‘perfect’ tense? Read this simple guide for answers to these questions and more:
First, definitions of writing tenses
In English, we have so-called ‘simple’ and ‘perfect’ tenses in the past, present and future. The simple tense merely conveys action in the time narrated. For example:
Past (simple) tense: Sarah ran to the store.
Present (simple) tense: Sarah runs to the store.
Future (simple) tense: Sarah will run to the store
Perfect tense uses the different forms of the auxiliary verb ‘has’ plus the main verb to show actions that have taken place already (or will/may still take place). Here’s the above example sentence in each tense, in perfect form:
Past perfect: Sarah had run to the store.
Present perfect: Sarah has run to the store.
Future perfect: Sarah will have run to the store.
In the past perfect, Sarah’s run is an earlier event in a narrative past:
Sarah had run to the store many times uneventfully so she wasn’t at all prepared for what she saw that morning.
You could use the future perfect tense to show that Sarah’s plans will not impact on another event even further in the future. For example:
Sarah will have run to the store by the time you get here so we won’t be late.
(You could also say ‘Sarah will be back from the store by the time you get here so we won’t be late.’ This is a simpler option using the future tense with the infinitive ‘to be’.) Here are some tips for using the tenses in a novel:
1. Decide which writing tenses would work best for your story
The majority of novels are written using simple past tense and the third person:
‘She ran her usual route to the store, but as she rounded the corner she came upon a disturbing sight.’
When you start drafting a novel or a scene, think about the merits of each tense. The present tense, for example, has the virtue of:
- Immediacy: The action unfolds in the same narrative moment as the reader experiences it (there is no temporal distance: Each action happens now)
- Simplicity: It’s undeniably easier to write ‘She runs her usual route to the store’ then to juggle all sorts of remote times using auxiliary verbs
Sometimes authors are especially creative in combining tense and POV. In Italo Calvino’s postmodern classic, If on a winter’s night a traveler (1979), the entire story is told in the present tense, in the second person. This has the effect of a ‘choose-your-own-adventure’ novel. To rewrite Sarah’s story in the same tense and POV:
You run your usual route to the store, but as you round the corner you come upon a disturbing sight.
This tense choice is smart for Calvino’s novel since it increases the puzzling nature of the story. In If on a winter’s night a traveler, you, the reader, are a character who buys Calvino’s novel If on a winter’s night a traveler, only to discover that there are pages missing. When you attempt to return it, you get sent on a wild goose chase after the book you want.
Tense itself can enliven an element of your story’s narration. In a thriller novel, for example, you can write tense scenes in first person for a sense of present danger:
A muffled shot. He sits up in bed, tensed and listening. Can’t hear much other than the wind scraping branches along the gutter.
2. Avoid losing clarity when mixing tenses
Because stories show us chains and sequences of events, often we need to jump back and forth between earlier and present scenes and times. This is especially true in novels where characters’ memories form a crucial part of the narrative.
It’s confusing when an author changes tense in the middle of a scene. The fragmented break in continuity makes it hard to place actions in relation to each other. For example:
Sarah runs her usual route to the store. As she turned the corner, she came upon a disturbing scene.
This is wrong because the verbs do not consistently use the same tense, even though it is clear (from context) that Sarah’s run is a continuous action in a single scene.
Ursula K. Le Guin offers excellent advice on mixing past and present in her writing manual, Steering the Craft:
‘It is highly probably that if you go back and forth between past and present tense, if you switch the tense of your narrative frequently and without some kind of signal (a line break, a dingbat,a new chapter) your reader will get all mixed up as to what happened before what and what’s happening after which and when we are, or were, at the moment.’
In short, make sure there are clear breaks between entire sections set in different narrative references.
3: Mix the tenses for colour and variety
Le Guin raises a good point about writing tenses. Le Guin describes the downside of telling a story almost exclusively in present tense:
‘It all rather sounds alike…it’s bland, predictable, risk-free. All too often, it’s McProse. The wealth and complexity of our verb forms is part of the color of the language. Using only one tense is like having a whole set of oil paints and using only pink.’
Instead mix different tenses where appropriate, but signal changes between time settings:
For example:
That morning, she had run her usual route to the store. As she turned the corner, she had come upon a disturbing scene. Apart from the glass and metal sprayed across the road like some outgoing tide’s deposit, there were what looked like two stretchers, mostly eclipsed from view by a swarm of emergency workers.
Now, safely home, she decided to lie down, all the while trying to get that scene out of her mind.
Mixing the tenses can help to show the cause and effect of interlocking events. The use of the past perfect to describe the scene of an accident in the example above is effective because the past perfect shows what is already complete. It gives it an irrevocable quality, the quality of a haunting, living-on-in-memory event. Finished, but not finished in the character’s mind’s eye.
4. Practice showing shadowy past or present actions using verb forms
In addition to simple and perfect tenses, there are different ‘moods’ that show verbs as hypothetical or possible actions. In addition to the indicative mood (‘she runs to the store’) there is also the subjunctive mood (‘If she runs to the store’) and the potential mood (‘she may run to the store’).
The different moods are useful because they can show possibilities and scenarios that might have happened, or might still happen, under different circumstances. Here are examples for correct uses for each of the tenses (in active voice):
Subjunctive mood:
Present tense: If she runs to the store…
Past tense: If she ran to the store…
Future tense: If she should run to the store…
Present perfect tense: If she has run to the store…
Past perfect tense: If she had run to the store…
Future perfect tense: If she should have run to the store….
Think of this mood as setting up a possibility. For example: ‘If she runs to the store, she better be quick because we’re leaving in 5.’
The potential mood helps us show shadowy, more hypothetical, uncertain scenarios:
Present tense: She may run to the store.
Present perfect tense: She may have run to the store.
Past perfect: She might have run to the store.
In each of these examples, the action is a possibility and the mood (using the various forms of ‘may’) shows this. These verb moods in conjunction with tense are useful. They help us describe situations in which a narrator or character does not have full knowledge of events, or is wondering how events might pan out.
5. Practice rewriting paragraphs in different tenses
It’s often easiest to get the hang of tense by doing. Pick a paragraph by an author and rewrite in each of the tenses. Here, for example, is a paragraph from David Sedaris’ essay, ‘Buddy, Can you Spare a Tie?’:
‘The only expensive thing I actually wear is a navy blue cashmere sweater. It cost four hundred dollars and looks like it was wrestled from the mouth of a tiger. “What a shame,” the dry cleaner said the first time I brought it in. The sweater had been folded into a loaf-sized bundle, and she stroked it, the way you might a freshly dead rabbit.’
Rewritten in past simple tense:
‘The only expensive thing I actually wore was a navy blue cashmere sweater. It cost four hundred dollars and looked like it was wrestled from the mouth of a tiger. “What a shame,” the dry cleaner said the first time I brought it in. The sweater was folded into a loaf-sized bundle, and she stroked it, the way you might a freshly dead rabbit.’
Here is the same passage in past perfect:
‘The only expensive thing I had actually worn was a navy blue cashmere sweater. It had cost four hundred dollars and had looked like it had been wrestled from the mouth of a tiger. “What a shame,” the dry cleaner had said, the first time I brought it in. The sweater had been folded into a loaf-sized bundle, and she had stroked it, the way you might a freshly dead rabbit.’
The effect is of a character describing the defining experiences before another event (before buying an even more expensive item of clothing, for example). For example, you could write ‘Before the lavish suit, the only expensive thing…’ before the paragraph.
4 Advantages of Writing in Present Tense
Writing in the present tense can add a sense of urgency and narrative simplicity to your work, which is one of the reasons it has become so commonplace. A good example of a successful novel written in the present tense is the young adult series The Hunger Games, in which we experience the events of the story through the first person POV of our protagonist Katniss Everdeen. Here are some advantages to writing in the present tense:
- It creates a sense of immediacy: Writing in the present tense makes it feel as though the events of the novel are happening in real time. This can help the reader feel an immediate connection to a first person narrator, since we witness the life events and emotional transformations of the POV character as they happen. The sense of immediacy inherent in a present-tense narrative can be particularly effective when writing fiction in the thriller genre, helping the reader feel close to the action of every plot twist.
- It intensifies the effect of an unreliable narrator. An unreliable narrator is an untrustworthy storyteller who withholds information or misleads the reader, casting doubt on the narrative as a whole. The use of the present tense combined with a first person perspective draws us inside a character’s head, allowing us to witness the character’s thoughts and stream of consciousness perspective. First person present tense can therefore intensify the effect of an unreliable narrator, since the reader feels close to the action and is locked into the character’s point of view. When they are revealed to be unreliable, the effect is all the more jarring.
- It simplifies tense. Stories told in the present tense generally rely on two main verb tenses: the simple present tense and the present progressive tense. Occasionally the author will use the simple past tense—typically when describing flashbacks or past events—or the simple future tense—when describing future events or a character’s aspirations. For the most part, however, the use of present tense eliminates the need to alternate between different tenses and use complex verb forms like past progressive, future perfect, or past perfect. The result is a simple, streamlined narrative.
- It makes your book feel more like a movie. One advantage to writing present tense novels is that makes the work feel more cinematic. Screenplays are written as present tense stories. Some authors use present tense to mimic the immediacy and suspense of a movie, creating the illusion that the events of the story are unfolding in the present moment. John Updike credits the influence of movies on his decision to write Rabbit, Run in the present tense, as he hoped to emulate the narrative voice normally found in cinema.
3 Disadvantages of Writing in Present Tense
Writing in the present tense can be effective in certain situations, but other narratives may call for the use of other tenses. Here are some of the drawbacks to writing in the present tense:
- It restricts your ability to move through time. Writing in the first person present or third-person present is an effective way to create a narrative that feels as though it’s happening in the present. However, writing in present tense can make it harder to artfully shift to past or future events, resulting in a narrative linearity that some authors find claustrophobic. Whether you’re writing in the third person or first person POV, you may find that you need to use past tense verbs in order to describe events that happened in the past.
- It encourages the inclusion of banal details. Whether it’s in first person, second person, or third person POV, the present tense encourages writers to describe events as they happen. The downside to this can be an overreliance on boring or superfluous details, since it feels more naturalistic to include the step-by-step actions of your characters when writing in present tense. Writing in past tense tends to encourage more judicious editing, which can help eliminate non-essential details.
- It reduces dramatic tension. A good story is filled with suspense. In literary fiction, sometimes that suspense comes from knowing how past or future events will affect different characters. A narrative written in past tense, for instance, may be able to derive tension from the narrator or speaker’s knowledge that something bad is about to happen—since they’re looking back on events that occurred in the past—while still withholding the specifics from the audience until the right moment. Creative writing that takes place solely in the present time frame is limited to creating tension out of the events currently happening.
–From https://www.quickanddirtytips.com/education/grammar/present-tense-books—
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Present
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Simple present
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Jack walks
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verb (+ s/es for third person)
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Present progressive
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Jack is walking
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am/is/are + present participle
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Present perfect
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Jack has walked (doesn’t sound like present to me?)
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has/have + past participle
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Present perfect progressive
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Jack has been walking
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has/have been + present participle
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Past
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Simple past
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Jack walked
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verb + d/ed/t (except for irregular verbs)
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Past progressive
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Jack was walking
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was/were + past participle
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Past perfect
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Jack had walked
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had + past participle
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Past perfect progressive
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Jack had been walking
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had been + present participle
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Future
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Simple future
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Jack will walk
Jack is going to walk |
will + verb
am/is/are going to + verb |
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Future progressive
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Jack will be walking
Jack is going to be walking |
will be + present participle
am/is/are going to be + present participle |
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Future perfect
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Jack will have walked
Jack is going to have walked |
will have + past participle
am/is/are going to have + past participle |
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Future perfect progressive
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Jack will have been walking
Jack is going to have been walking |
will have been + present participle
am/is/are going to have been + present participle |
A Sampling of Books Written in the Present Tense
- Time Traveler’s Wife by Audrey Niffenegger
- House of Sand and Fog by Andre Dubus III
- Choke by Chuck Palahniuk
- Fight Club by Chuck Palahniuk
- Ilium by Dan Simmons (some parts)
- Olympos by Dan Simmons (some parts)
- Rabbit, Run by John Updike
- Line of Vision by David Ellis
- The Sound of My Voice by Ron Butlin (also in second person)
- Half Asleep in Frog Pajamas by Tom Robbins (also in second person)
- The Mezzanine by Nicholson Baker [This one was recommended by a Twitter friend, but I couldn’t independently confirm that it’s in the present tense. Anyone?]
–From https://www.outsideonline.com/2406661/rob-krar-ultrarunner-depression—
Rob Krar’s Never-Ending Race
He’s had to embrace incredible physical pain to win iconic ultramarathons like the Leadville Trail 100 and the Western States Endurance Run. But that’s a form of suffering Rob Krar can control—unlike his decades-long struggle with depression.
“I was afraid to leave him. He didn’t tell me, ‘I’m thinking about killing myself.’ But I didn’t want to leave him alone during a several-week patch.”
Christina Bauer sits with her hands clasped, and her posture is perfect. She’s worked all day in an office advising community-college students. It’s a job she never expected to love, but back when she was in college and having a hard time, she took a semester off to do Outward Bound, the outdoor-leadership program for youths. She learned how to read a map and navigate without trails, how to find water and leave no trace. There was something about doing hard stuff outside that changed how she saw herself. At first she thought she’d seek out a career in policy and protect the wild places she loved, but then she worked at a camp doing conflict resolution with troubled kids, and that was it. She’s been a counselor, in some capacity, her entire adult life.
She was the first person Rob Krar told. About going in the hole.
Visit https://www.outsideonline.com/2406661/rob-krar-ultrarunner-depression to read the full article
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What do you think? Would you write a story in present tense? Why or why not?
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